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Re: I need voices
I didn't really know where else to put this, so here it is. I am putting together a machinima series called Plague. If you want to know what machinima is, ...
Oct 22, 2008 -
Re: The Defenestration of Prague #1
Hello Cal. I'll be your critiquer for today. Yay! So, you wanted specific comments on your tense and how it flowed. As far as I could tell, your flow went ...
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: Jared's Critique Lounge
Could you rip this apart please? They're my last two entries for Cal's contest.
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: The Mask Maker [3]
Okay, Jared, I'm here for a review of part 3. This is a Catholic church, right? So, how come the priest has a wife? Priests in Catholic churches take vows ...
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: Two Entries for Cal's Contest
006. Maverick Gillie sailed through the ancient structures on her little boat. It hung together by wire, rope, and faith; a derelict amidst ruins. Yet it sailed true and never ...
Oct 18, 2008 -
Re: The Mask Maker [2]
Well, hi Jared! I can only hope I will be as helpful to you as you were to me. So, now we get a little more into Joseph's mind. I ...
Oct 18, 2008 -
Re: The Mask Maker
Hi Jared! So, you are wondering about your description. Well, first off, where are they? I know that they're in an execution chamber, but you never describe it as such. ...
Oct 17, 2008 -
Re: High School Seniors: Class of 2009!
I've been having a pretty easy year too, not counting the stuff I'm doing for college. I still don't have a specific one that I want to go to. I've ...
Oct 17, 2008 -
Re: The Elephant Boy {twelve}
Hi Ky! I come again to critique this very interesting story. Let's get down to it. It's like God has taken a penny to the scratch-it lotto card of the ...
Oct 17, 2008 -
Re: I've been here two years.
Awesome. Congrats.
Oct 17, 2008 -
Re: Have a NaNoWriMo.org account? (08)
Conrad Rice. Yes, I know, I'm super original. Ha ha.
Oct 15, 2008 -
Re: New YWS Feedback
Cool stuff. But on the choosing your font type, what if somebody wants to do a work in Old English font? Or will the fonts be limited to readable ones? ...
Oct 15, 2008 -
Re: I got published!
It was a post apocalyptic story. It's here on YWS, in my portfolio as "Dandelion Season."
Oct 15, 2008 -
Re: It's Analogous
Film is to camera as fish are to water.
Oct 14, 2008 -
Re: I got published!
I sent off a copy of my story "Dandelion Season" to the BudzusHammer magazine a few months ago. I got a complimentary issue of the September/October 2008 edition that has ...
Oct 14, 2008
